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  • Gray A Loon
    Member
    • Jul 2017
    • 56

    What makes a good story?

    Changing my approach slightly.

    In your opinion, what makes a good looner story? What elements should be included to make it an enjoyable read?
  • BlowAndInhale
    Breath King
    • Oct 2018
    • 52

    #2
    Re: What makes a good story?

    I like stories about couples who engage in looning. But at the end of the day, it's each other that they ultimately love.

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    • wildheart
      Senior Member
      • Apr 2015
      • 859

      #3
      Re: What makes a good story?

      It depends if you’re going for a short one off story or a longer series. In a longer story or series, I find character development to be important. In shorter stories it has to have a good plot and be something a bit different. Try to think of something that no one’s done before.
      How big will it go? Only one way to find out...
      My website: loonerstories.weebly.com

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      • t17forLife
        Senior Member
        • May 2015
        • 226

        #4
        Re: What makes a good story?

        Originally posted by BlowAndInhale
        I like stories about couples who engage in looning. But at the end of the day, it's each other that they ultimately love.
        Second this. How's progress on my story that I suggested?

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        • Bobywan
          Member
          • Sep 2012
          • 33

          #5
          Re: What makes a good story?

          I think the characters need to have some kind of personality. I like stories where we get some insight into their relationships and how they interact with balloons. How do they react when balloons pop? I also like when they talk about what they're going to do -- teasing and foreshadowing. Of course, physical description and detail helps to put us in the scene.

          I've seen a few stories where the characters are literally just there to have sex with, or there to pop balloons — they're a cardboard cutout in all other regards. I think those stories are less appealing.

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          • ThatOneLooner
            Senior Member
            • Mar 2016
            • 294

            #6
            Re: What makes a good story?

            Yeah, make sure they’re fleshed out characters with a personality.

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            • Dust of the Saturn
              Stretched like space-time
              • Feb 2018
              • 300

              #7
              Re: What makes a good story?

              I personally find that unique descriptions with over exaggerated details make up a nice story. For me, there's a difference between

              "she blew the balloon"

              and

              "she put the balloon between her lips and blew"

              but even better, is this:

              "She grabbed the balloon with her fingers and gently opened her mouth. Her tongue greeted the mouthpiece which got completely coated in the pool of saliva. The neck, now submerged in her mouth, was covered with pink lipstick which left her mark on the balloon in the most feminine way possible. Her chest suddenly expanded trying to get as much air as possible before releasing it inside the balloon which started to gain pressure and inflate."
              And I ask myself, why? and all I hear is the cold, dead silence of the cosmos.

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              • Joe Sixpanel
                Member
                • Sep 2018
                • 51

                #8
                Re: What makes a good story?

                Originally posted by loonerfun00
                I personally find that unique descriptions with over exaggerated details make up a nice story. For me, there's a difference between

                "she blew the balloon"

                and

                "she put the balloon between her lips and blew"

                but even better, is this:

                "She grabbed the balloon with her fingers and gently opened her mouth. Her tongue greeted the mouthpiece which got completely coated in the pool of saliva. The neck, now submerged in her mouth, was covered with pink lipstick which left her mark on the balloon in the most feminine way possible. Her chest suddenly expanded trying to get as much air as possible before releasing it inside the balloon which started to gain pressure and inflate."




                Yes. That's the way to say it.

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                • SusieDK
                  Senior Member
                  • Dec 2017
                  • 201

                  #9
                  Re: What makes a good story?

                  Hi,

                  To me it makes a story great when I can identify myself with the characters and/or the situation. This makes the story come to life so to speak.

                  In order for this to happen focus need to be on feelings and emotions instead of pure ‘action’. It is also important that the story has some realism to it. I sometimes get the feeling that stories are a bit too much actually. I can maybe illustrate it with comparing to crime stories: Some authors need many horrible murders to keep the reader ‘caught’, but the story is more like ‘just’ entertaining instead og being really captivating. Great authors can do with a single murder or mystery in a way that completely captures the mind of the reader and drags her/him into the World of the story and doesn’t let go, sometimes even long after the story is read to its end.

                  The difference - or at least a very important part of it - is that the great story makes the Reader identify with the story and sort ‘step into the movie’ instead of just standing on the sideline watching.

                  I imagine it would be possible to write a very exciting story about this with balloons without having unrealisticly many balloons being popped or ridden or whatever. Just one single balloon or maybe a couple would be enough. Instead the story could center on the feelings and emotions of the characters and leave the ‘balloon action’ as maybe the climax of the story. Too much action is (to me) sort like Christmas every day - it rather quickly looses its appeal.

                  Does this make any sense?

                  Sincerely
                  Susie
                  Last edited by SusieDK; 27-01-2019, 07:23.

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                  • ChillinHaze
                    Senior Member
                    • Sep 2016
                    • 133

                    #10
                    Re: What makes a good story?

                    Diversity and Details

                    I would say these are two of the core elements that make up a good story.
                    Characters can have the same kink for example but might actually indulge in it in very contrasting ways.
                    Their approaches to the same end result can be very different.
                    Of course this is also applicable to the setting and location. Why just have it play in the bedroom or even the house? It could happen on a boat or any other place you would least expect it.
                    Or through a means that you normally don't think of.

                    And details are what makes a story more palpable and vivid. Putting in the right details in the right amount may make the difference between making it just a hollow fantasy or something that is living and breathing, trying to suck the reader into it's grasp giving them a most enjoyable and memorable experience.

                    Also with reoccurring characters it's important to give more and more insight into their inner workings.
                    How do they see the object of their kink?
                    How do they approach it?
                    What do they think an eventual partner thinks and feels about it?
                    Do they change their views about it over time?
                    Or maybe they don't because they are actually already at the point were they are most comfortable with it.
                    Then it should be shown in which way that expresses itself or how they came to that point.

                    Lots of nuances that can help shape a character in one way or the other.

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                    • bigballcollector
                      Senior Member
                      • Mar 2017
                      • 134

                      #11
                      Re: What makes a good story?

                      Just my two cents... I like stories whose characters are men, so I can imagine (and feel) the guy in the story is me, every detail pops up in my mind like a real situation. I love that kind of stuff despite I am not gay.
                      Let it be, let it free...but keep it nicely

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                      • Helium1234
                        Member
                        • Dec 2016
                        • 43

                        #12
                        Re: What makes a good story?

                        WIsh i saw this earilier. . BUt always love stories with huge helium balloons that make people float or lift, or some transformation always makes the floating fun. Theres been a bunch I like, but they all have those common theme.

                        Some fun captions ive done - https://www.deviantart.com/helium1234

                        Some fav stories
                        Kari's Party Bouquet - https://www.deviantart.com/blownup/a...quet-357030937

                        High Time For Harold - https://www.deviantart.com/duckman16...rold-762352494

                        UPlifting Punishment - https://www.deviantart.com/heliumpon...ment-445284859

                        never laid a finger on me -0 https://www.deviantart.com/heliumpon...n-me-676994367

                        NOzzel - https://www.deviantart.com/heliumgir...ozzle-92115765

                        Enjoy!

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                        • scuba
                          Senior Member
                          • Jan 2017
                          • 443

                          #13
                          Re: What makes a good story?

                          I totaly agre with Helium 1234..
                          Storys with helium balloons making people float is my absolute favorites

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                          • Tracy
                            Senior Member
                            • May 2018
                            • 196

                            #14
                            Re: What makes a good story?

                            A good friend of mine was an editor at Penthouse for several years. No joke! She (yes, she) had the best advice I've ever seen for writers of erotica. Don't write to turn yourself on. 90% of the porn writing out there is a masturbatory exercise (often quite literally) on the part of the author... those are the stories least likely to interest the readers.

                            Your purpose in writing erotica (anything, really!) is to engage your reader. Don't lose that perspective.

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                            • BalloonBoyUK
                              Banned
                              • Dec 2018
                              • 500

                              #15
                              Re: What makes a good story?

                              Here's what I think. Feel free to ignore or adhere to any/none of these, as you wish.

                              For me, I need more info than a story which simply involves Person A discovering Person B likes balloons, and then proceeds to taunt/tease/have sex wth them. Make the story natural, interesting, and don't be dull or contrived. If all you plan on doing is creating a scenario in which two people have sex with/using balloons, then - in my view - that's going to get rather dull rather quickly.

                              Don't rely on porn terminology either. Graphical language, or crude/vulgar sexual language isn't necessarily a turn-on for many people. Aim high in terms of your linguistic skills! There's plenty of ways to describe the human body, without using gynaecological, scientific, or explicit language/terms. Get creative!

                              Be sexy, sensual, erotic, but be realistic. Don't make every man, have a 12-inch penis, and be a huge "stud", and don't make every women be a Hollywood starlet with a perfect, flawless figure, with big breasts and blonde hair. Think outside of the box, so-to-speak!

                              Make the situation seem natural, and reasonable. If it is to be a fantasy story, that's cool too, but then you can be free to be as outlandish as you want - although it still has to be believable within the confines of the fantasy itself. It's like with superhero movies: we all know they are indestructible, but if they are, then what's the point of them fighting villains, if there's no way the villain will ever win against them?

                              Make your characters realistic, and give them some flaws. If everyone is perfect in looks, and perfect in their characterisation, then that's deathly bland. I don't want perfection (even in a fantasy). I want something that's got a bit more substance than that.

                              Give your readers credit. Don't treat them all like they have the mental ability of a three-year-old. If we can read about sex, we're probably old-enough and mature enough, to be capable of enjoying a mixture of long and short words.

                              Pay attention to story continuity, grammar, spelling and layout. Don't have your characters change name, or the way they look, (or whatever else), part-way through a story. Check it over carefully. No one expects perfection, but if you want your work read, and treated with some kind of reasonable manner, then please show it to us in the best way you can. The more effort you make as the author, the more effort we will make as readers of your work.

                              Lastly, be original. Don't just contrive a situation, as a means to an end. Flesh the story out. Give us a beginning, middle and an end (of some kind), even if it's not in that specific order, that isn't just explosive (male) orgasms, and the couple kissing, cuddling and lying in bed, both feeling like life is perfect, and the world is a joyous nebulousness of nirvana. Life isn't perfect, and even in fantasy stories, you need a bit of imperfection and darkness.

                              Oh, and this one's for the hetero men: consider the way you write your female characters. Not everything they say or do, has to be sexually-suggestive. Not every woman wants to be seen as a sex object, as something just for men to be pleased by, and who will aquiesce to a man's every need and whim. Give your female characters something more than the ability to enjoy sex, and blow-up balloons well. Women are NOT sex objects, not even in fantasy and fiction! Balance things out a little, and consider what a woman reading your story might want to see/hear/be represented as.

                              Okay, that's all.
                              Last edited by BalloonBoyUK; 31-01-2019, 18:42.

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